Tuesday 24 May 2016
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Awesome Mate! I liked the way you put a every story in your writing. Next time you could have 2 or 3 endings that will make you survive the 6th wave. Here is a link to check out my blog http://ollier7.blogspot.co.nz/
ReplyDeleteI got the right end this time! Also it looks a lot better with the slides! :)
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ReplyDeleteFriends, here was my Killerdrone Story.
ReplyDeleteKILLERDRONE!!
Sam the inventor had made a drone to take photos of special events that happened around the West Coast. Then, along came Luke, and he said to Sam: “Hey, Sam, I think that drone would look much better with a chainsaw attached to it!” “Would it really?” Replied Sam. “Yeah, it would.” Claimed Luke. “Try it!”
So, Sam the inventor went into his workshop, and he got some rope. And a chainsaw. “Okay, here we go…” Said Sam.
Seconds later… “And…there!” Sam had done it! He had successfully attached the chainsaw to the camera drone! “Now we need a launching pad.” Exclaimed Luke. “Maybe Mac the Blacksmith can help!” Said Sam. “He can make a launching pad out of metal!” So, Luke the dapper dude walked off to the blacksmith’s workshop.
“Hey, Mac, can you make an awesome metal launch pad for my killer drone?” Luke said. “What’s a killer drone?” Mac asked. “It’s a chainsaw attached to a camera drone.” Said Luke. “Awesome! I’m on it.” Said Mac.
5 days later… “The launching pad is ready!” Claimed Mac the Blacksmith. “Thanks, Blackie!” Said Luke, as he tried to lift the metal launch pad. “Oh my gosh, this is heavy as!” Shouted Luke. “I’ll help.” Said Mac. So, the two carefully carried the launch pad over to Sam the inventor’s workshop.
Sam put the finished killer drone onto the launching pad, which was outside his workshop. Mac set the timer. 3...2...1… BLAST OFF! The Killer Drone whirred up into the morning sky. 10 minutes later, the killer drone arrived at Paroa School, and it started to cut up Room 7! By the time Sam, Mac and Luke had arrived at Paroa School in their car, Room 7 was in pieces. Sam stepped out of the car. He said: “Killer Drone, smash all the other classrooms in the school!”
The drone immediately went to work. An hour later, the drone had done its work. And there was evidence to prove it, too. There were walls of the classrooms littered everywhere! “Killer Drone, come back!” Yelled Sam. The drone started to whirr back, but then, a balloon got stuck in its motor, and then the killer drone fell to the ground, conquered by a balloon! “Killer Drone Is Murdered By A Balloon!” Said Luke, pretending to be a news man. “NOOO!” Cried Sam, howling in sadness and anger. “My best invention ever is...DEAD!!” “Ah, I see the problem. There’s a balloon-making machine over there.” Said Mac, pointing over to a balloon-making machine sitting on the school court. It was hired by a clown working at the circus, and the clown needed the balloon-making machine to fill balloons with helium. “Luckily, I’ve got my blacksmith’s mallet handy. EEEE-YAH!” Mac yelled, as he swung his mallet at the contraption. Pieces of the balloon-making machine went everywhere! Some belts flew away, there were bolts, slabs of metal, balloons, small conveyer belts, and even some wheels! The school now looked much messier, because it was littered with the many pieces of the balloon-making machine. “I think we should just go back to my house for a cup of tea. We should just completely forget about the killer drone.” Luke said. So, half an hour later, the three were sitting around Luke’s coffee table. “Mmmm...tea!” They all said.
THE END! (Or maybe it isn’t)
An hour later, Mac and Sam went back to their houses to eat dinner. At 9:00pm, Sam rang up Luke. “Goodnight!” Said Sam.
Now it’s THE END!
(I’m not joking. It really is THE END.)
Another way to read the story: Go onto full screen, and keep your finger on the right arrow button!
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